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Post by tleev on Mar 25, 2005 6:35:05 GMT -5
What is going on in your mind Why are you so out of touch Pretending in things that won’t ever happen Dreaming of days that will never occur
You say this man is all but yours So perfect and so strong You have it all in common, You share this special bond
“If only I could show him”<br>“He’ll see how much I care”<br>But this man has no interest He won’t be a part of your world
You follow him and watch him Laughing at all his jokes You think of him as an angel And ignore each little fault
He rolls his eyes and laughs nervously And tells you to go away He can’t understand why You play this dangerous game
You don’t know who you’re playing with You think of him as an innocent child Someone you can hold hands and giggle with While you ignore the true man inside
Get on with your life, little girl Why is it that you can’t see His heart belongs to someone else And that person is me.
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Post by Yertle_The_Turtle on Mar 25, 2005 6:50:56 GMT -5
Ohhh!! I love that at the end!! This has such a great buildup. One of the best things I've read, actually.
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Manja
Freaks Of A Feather
Madder than a motherf***er
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Post by Manja on Mar 25, 2005 7:48:47 GMT -5
nice, the ending is also really cool, i never saw it coming at all. good stuff
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Post by Angel on Mar 25, 2005 9:14:10 GMT -5
Good ending.
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Noone Special
Freaks Of A Feather
Don't Forget To Be The Way You Are
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Post by Noone Special on Mar 25, 2005 9:17:58 GMT -5
+1 I really liked it
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Post by camelianhermitcrab on Mar 25, 2005 10:22:00 GMT -5
Very nice. You have great talent.
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RHcp
Freaks Of A Feather
naked we come and bruised we go
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Post by RHcp on Mar 25, 2005 23:14:05 GMT -5
Thats great, I liked how you made the ending unexpecting too. nice stuff
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